Is Your Promotion Ready for Prime Time? Seven Make-or-Break Lessons in Staging a Successful Retail Sales Event from Amazon

With the holiday season just around the corner, talk of “Black Friday” and “Cyber Monday” sales have already become practically unavoidable. These two retail sale juggernauts have become so deeply entrenched in our cultural lexicon that they actually shape consumer behavior, as eager shoppers anticipate and plan around their arrival for weeks or even months ahead of time. But what if you want to go your own way? Can you conceive of your own unique promotion that will excite consumers and jump-start spending behavior on par with Black Friday? This was the very challenge Amazon attempted to tackle this past summer with their “Prime Day” promotion. Coinciding with the company’s 20th anniversary, Prime Day was a one-day sale that was promised to include “more deals than Black Friday.” Amazon flooded the marketplace with advertising in advance of Prime Day and whipped up great excitement and speculation among customers about what types of deals might be offered. However, when Prime Day arrived and the sales rolled out, the reaction was decidedly less enthusiastic, with many underwhelmed shoppers turning to social media to express their apathy, disappointment and even downright disgust. In the end, Prime Day was not the colossal failure that the Twitterverse would have you believe. In fact, just a few hours into the day, Amazon sent out a press release claiming that “peak order rates have already surpassed 2014 Black Friday.” Moreover, “Prime members have already bought tens of thousands of Fire TV Sticks, 35,000 Lord of the Rings Blu-Ray sets, 28,000 Rubbermaid sets, and 4,000 Echo devices in 15 minutes. The Kate Spade purse was gone in less than a minute. We also sold 1,200 of the $999 TVs in less than 10 minutes. And there are thousands more deals coming.” While Prime Day may not be the next great retail phenomenon, Amazon’s venture into inventing a new sales holiday offers several valuable lessons in the do’s and don’ts of crafting a successful promotional event:

1. Build buzz around your promotion.

One thing that Amazon did right was building up excitement in advance of the event. They ran advertising for weeks leading up to Prime Day, yet they kept the specifics about the deals that would be offered under wraps, leading to great speculation among Amazon enthusiasts about the kind of fantastic steals they might be able to score. Many of these shoppers even logged on early to try to capitalize on the sale. Any successful promotion starts with hype. You must have a plan in place to build excitement and get people talking so that once it begins, you have a eager customers ready and waiting to jump on board. Of course, hype is just that. It should be the drum roll leading up to the big finish. Otherwise, it’s just an empty promise that will result in disappointed (and distrustful) customers.

2. Deliver on the expectations you’ve created.

By far, the biggest point of failure for Prime Day promotion is that many customers expected much more than Amazon ultimately delivered. The majority of the complaints about Prime Day centered around the lack of perceived value or desirability of the discounted items. Typically, during Black Friday and Cyber Monday, retailers tease deep discounts on highly desirable items (such as TVs, gaming consoles and premium brand products) to get shoppers in the door, counting on them to scoop up other items that they want to unload in the process. But on Prime Day, the best deals centered around Amazon’s own tech gadgets, like their Fire TV stick, Kindle and Echo, while many of the other products that were included, such as dishwasher detergent, socks and even a 55-gallon barrel of lube, were much less attractive and left many customers feeling underwhelmed. Furthermore, Amazon front-loaded the hottest deals at midnight PST, so by the time most customers jumped online in the morning, everything had long been sold out. While Amazon has the numbers to prove they sold tons of item during Prime Day, there’s no denying that, for many customers, they did not meet the expectations that they established in the pre-sale campaigns, leaving the retailer with a major black eye in the court of public opinion. When planning a promotion, be sure that you live up to the hype you create. If your focus is on marketing the promotion instead of on the promotion itself, then you are setting yourself up for disappointed customers.

3. Remember: bigger does not always mean better.

Looking back at Amazon’s pre-sale campaign messaging, you will notice that they refer to Prime Day as being bigger than Black Friday and having “more deals.” Nowhere could I find any mention that Prime Day would be “better” than Black Friday, just that there would be more deals offered, which is a perfect example of the old adage that “bigger does not always equal better.” Item for item, Prime Day may have indeed had more to offer than Amazon did on Black Friday, but that didn’t matter to most customers. People don’t necessarily want tons of options, they just want the right ones. When planning your own promotions, think big, but also ensure that you do not sacrifice quality for quantity. Instead of focusing on offering a wide array of deals, go the opposite direction and think about personalizing your promotion. These days, with the abundance of traffic analytics and customer account data available, it’s easy to know what your customers shop for and purchase most often. Use this information to your advantage and craft customized offers that reward your loyal shoppers with discounts on the things they really want and need. And for goodness sake, notify them ahead of time that their favorite items will be on sale! This is definitely one area where Amazon really missed the boat. After all, who has more customer data and marketing intelligence than one of the Web’s biggest retail giants?

4. Don’t try to please everyone.

The fact that we are talking about all the complaints that people had about Prime Day is interesting in and of itself. After all, this is a sale we’re talking about! People are actually upset that the deals offered weren’t good enough! That’s the very definition of a First World problem and it shows that, no matter how hard you try, you will never please everyone. When planning a promotion, consider your customers and what they want, but don’t get too hung up on trying to include something for everyone. Doing this can force you to go to market with a campaign that is unwieldy and unfocused, and no matter how hard you try, there will always be someone who complains that they did not get what they wanted. Do your best to set and meet expectations, but also be prepared to hear complaints, and accept that this is part of doing business.

5. Motivation is key, and timing is everything.

One of the key reasons Prime Day was not a bigger success is that the motivation behind the event was driven by Amazon, not it’s customers. Amazon decided that they wanted to stage a huge promotion in the middle of the summer to celebrate their 20th anniversary. But what does that have to do with me, the consumer? Nothing at all, really. As Ed Stevens, CEO of Shopatron explains, Amazon’s chief failure was that they neglected to tap into any real time- or emotion-based motivation for their customers: “Prime Day will in no way replace Black Friday. The primary reasons for this include the amount of consumer discretionary dollars in July will not change. Consumers are most motivated to spend their money when it’s associated with an event, and most holiday sales are centered around a sentimental or emotional gift giving component…Prime Day is an unsentimental, ordinary sales gimmick akin to a car dealership having a Labor Day blowout sale.” Everyone knows that the key to making a sale of any sort is to instill a sense of urgency in the buyer. July is far removed from any major gift-giving holiday, so as a shopper, the idea of Prime Day as an early Black Friday is null and void. Unless there’s something I want for myself and happen to find an unbeatable deal on, I’m not likely to part ways with my money on this particular day just because a company tells me I should. When you’re planning your next big promotion, make sure the timing is right, and that you’re tapping into motivations that are relevant to your customer base. If you own a stationery shop, you can run a promotion timed to coincide with brides who are planning for the summer wedding season. If you run a sporting goods store, it doesn’t make sense for you to run a Valentine’s Day sale, but it does make sense for you to plan promotions tied to the beginning of each new sports season for adults and kids needing to gear up for spring baseball or fall football and so on.

6. Make it easy for your customers to participate.

Another one of the chief complaints about Amazon’s Prime Day was the way in which offers were presented: an infinite scroll of items presented five at a time in no particular order which continued on for hundreds of pages. Who wants to wade through that for the chance at finding something they might want at a price they might want to pay for it? If you’re going to run a promotion, don’t make your customers work hard to make you money. People love a good deal, but only to the extent to which it doesn’t cause them an excess of inconvenience. Don’t forget: there’s always a competitor lurking in the wings to give your customers what you fail to deliver.

7. Accept that you will have a target on your back.

With Prime Day well underway and customer reactions starting to roll in, Walmart jumped into the conversation by offering a number of their own “Rollback” deals. They were able to sit back and see what Amazon was doing and then respond in a way that would allow them to try to trump Amazon’s big sale – and for many customers, this move worked as they found (in their opinion at least) better deals on Walmart.com. What does this show us? That the first one to do something is the one with the target on their back! After all, it is always easier to follow rather than to lead. By waiting to see what Amazon had up their sleeve, Walmart was able to evaluate the situation and respond, instead of taking the leap and being first into the fray. This is a reality for any company that forges into uncharted territory, since it allows your competition to learn from any mistakes you make and build upon the path that you establish. Does this mean you should be reactive rather than proactive in your promotional strategy? Not at all. Many companies that were “first in” benefited from that position. eBay was the first company to do online auctions, and sites that tried to follow in their footsteps slowly failed and closed up shop while eBay remains a powerhouse. Sometimes, the first one in wins the day, but other times, they end up being the target that everyone else comes gunning for. Ultimately, though, it’s good planning and solid execution that are the differentiators between a promotion that soars and one that sinks.

Ten Secrets to Must-Read Copy

If you’re counting on your website to help you grow your business (as well you should be), then you must accomplish three goals:

• You must get them there. That’s traffic building disciplines such as SEO and extending your content to places beyond your own website.
• You must engage them. That’s great design and user interface.
• You must persuade them to stay and, ultimately, to buy. That’s where razor-sharp content comes in.

The myth of web copy

The often-used argument, "no one reads anything" is true, but it’s only half the story.

The fact of the matter is that no one reads anything that doesn’t hold their interest or isn't a pleasure to read.

You have only seconds to make the case for visitors to stay on your site and give you their time and attention. Overcoming the burden of proof that your content is interesting and relevant is a formidable challenge but one that can be conquered, if you know the tricks of the trade.

Here are the 10 secrets to writing copy that demands to be read:

1. Start strong.

Your headings are your first make-or-break point in determining whether a reader will continue to delve deeper into your site or give up and look elsewhere to find what they need. They must grab attention and make the case that what follows is relevant to their interests.

In this way, your copy should flow like runners in a relay race. A great headline will motivate your readers to continue to the first sentence below. A strong first sentence will keep them hooked as they move to the second sentence and so on.

You must start strong and then maintain sharp, focused writing throughout to lead readers inch-by-inch down the page.

2. Break it up.

If you have only one heading on a page, you have only one opportunity to sell your content to the reader.

Don’t put all your eggs in that basket. Instead, divide your copy into sections by topic and cap them off with subheads. In doing so, you create multiple chances to grab the reader’s attention as they scan the page looking for information that is relevant and interesting.

Each subsection should have a main idea and a distinct purpose. Breaking up your text into bite-sized bits is not a band-aid for lazy writing that doesn’t get right to the point.

Prioritize and make your most important points first to minimize your chances of losing the reader before they reach your key sales message.

3. Keep it short, sweet and scannable.

No matter who your target reader is, you can be sure of one fact: their time is a precious  and limited resource. You’ll never have more than a minute to show the goods, make your point, build your case or speak your mind.

The tendency of readers on the Web is to scan down the page to identify interesting information or answers to their questions.

They aren’t likely to read more than a few sentences at a time, so make sure your key points are easily identifiable. Use call outs and sidebars to say, “Hey, you, look at this!”

Bullet points are your friends. So are periods. Short, concise sentences are easier to process while scanning.

Forget what you learned in school about paragraph structure. If a paragraph needs to be one sentence, so be it. It’s better to make sure your most important information doesn’t get overlooked than to please your sixth grade grammar teacher.

4. Choose your words carefully.

Naturally, you have great passion for what you do, and you want to share as much information as possible about your product or service with anyone who will listen.

Unfortunately, in today's culture of the Web, you just don't have that luxury.

Every word on the page ticks down the clock on the window of opportunity for you to convert a visitor to a customer.

Channel your enthusiasm for your business into making sure that your content is concise yet powerful. One fantastic sentence that hits the bullseye will serve you better than a mediocre, rambling paragraph any day of the week.

Challenge yourself to pare your text down to only what's absolutely essential. Be ruthless in writing and rewriting to ensure that there are no wasted words.

Edit, edit, edit. And when you think you are done, edit again.

5. Don’t forget to qualify and quantify.

Brevity is not a license to write in sweeping generalities. Broad statements that aren’t supported with facts or evidence immediately raise red flags of mistrust for readers.

It’s important to be specific. Don’t write excessively flowery prose like you’re describing menu items at a restaurant. Do provide meaningful details.

Statistics and customer testimonials are great assets that add credibility to your key sales messages without wasting words.

6. Write like a human.

When writing for your website, don’t turn into a keyword-spewing robot, and don’t stuff your copy full of jargon and big words to make yourself sound like an expert.

Write like you would naturally talk so that you come across as a real person and not a product brochure from the 1950s. Allow your personality to shine through. It’s better to err on the side of informality than to alienate readers with stiff, lifeless writing.

Don’t think about addressing an audience. Instead, approach your writing as if you were having a conversation with one person. What would you say if they were standing in front of you?

7. Know your audience

Knowing your audience is key to knowing what to leave in and what to leave out. You don’t have to start at A if your readers are already at K.

We’re not just talking demographics here. You must think about the typical person who would land on your website, their level of sophistication with the subject matter and where they are in their decision-making process.

Is the type of product or service you provide something that is already familiar to them? If so, skip the basics. They already know they need what you have to offer, so get down to the business of demonstrating why yours is superior to the other guys’.

Are you bringing something new to the market? Then you’ll need to take a step back and educate your readers about your product (no rambling, please!) as well as why they should trust you.

8. Focus on the reader.

Good writing is not about telling readers what you want them to know.

It’s definitely not about stroking your own ego.

It’s about answering the questions that are present in your reader’s mind:

• Will this solve my problem?
• Will this save me time?
• Will this save me money?
• Is this company trustworthy?
• What if I’m not happy with the product or service I receive?

As you address these concerns, think less about features and more about benefits:

• What value will they receive from your product or service?
• What do they already use or possess, and why is yours better?
• What is not having your product costing them in terms of time, money, efficiency or even happiness and life satisfaction?

Demonstrate how your product or service pays for itself. Anticipate sales objections and address them directly.

9. Don’t answer every question.

You don’t have to introduce yourself, make your pitch and close the sale all on one page. It’s okay to leave them wanting more.

Your job is to start the conversation.

If you can hit the sweet spot between providing just enough information to pique your readers' interest and not putting all your cards on the table at once, you open the door for them to call you, e-mail you or complete a contact form.

10. Bring in the designers.

Wait a minute – I thought this article was about good writing!

Technically, it’s about good content, which goes hand-in-hand with good design.

It’s classic a chicken-or-the-egg scenario. If your writing is Pulitzer-worthy but your design is lackluster, you’ll turn away customers. If your design is beautiful but your writing is dull and disorganized, you’ll send them heading for the hills just as quickly. You can’t have one and not the other.

Design is the packaging for the delivery your content. If a reader lands on a page and sees nothing but a disorganized sea of text, they’ll be immediately overwhelmed, and they won’t even begin to try to make sense of it.

You need the help of a designer to paint your content on the canvas of your site. By augmenting your text with beautiful photography, illustrations, diagrams, infographics and pull-quotes, you’ll create a wonderful reading experience every time.

Need help?

While each of these tactics is simple and straightforward in theory, they are challenging to put into practice.

If you are writing your own content, it’s important to sharpen your writing skills and discipline yourself to keep your text brief but powerful.

If you’re not confident that you’re up to the task, don’t hesitate to call in the professionals. Fame Foundry’s copywriters are masters of the art form of crafting your sales message so that it is both comprehensive and to the point, while addressing the key motivations and concerns of your readers.

The investment you make up-front in ensuring that your copy is sharp, concise and well-designed is a drop in the bucket compared to the sales opportunities you’ll be guaranteed to lose as a result of dull, disorganized content that sends visitors running to Google to find a more appealing option.